Abbie Hi. I like the way you've personalised the blog - adding the feeds is a good idea. You could also think about adding a list of linkst to favourite web sites.
Your post about the news stories regarding new Tory policy initiatives is interesting - but take care with your writing - try to be clear about what you're trying to say - I think you write that the new policy idea about teachers and unruly pupils is another Tory 'bride' - I think you mean bribe - and I'm not sure that's the right word to describe it... Overall in the post, you develop some interesting ideas but you need to make sure that they flow together into a coherent argument.
Watch out for your links - neither of the links to BBC news stories seem to work - you also haven't put links in the review of the Go Fug Yourself blog - you need to put links in the posts on your assessment blog.
You've used quite a small point size on the body text in your posts - remember that reading on screen is difficult - you need to help your readers. Remember to break up long paras too.
Try to find ways to add visuals to your posts - in general, it's ok to borrow visuals if you credit them or link back to the site where they came from.
But overall, this is definitely going in the right direction.
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Abbie
Hi. I like the way you've personalised the blog - adding the feeds is a good idea. You could also think about adding a list of linkst to favourite web sites.
Your post about the news stories regarding new Tory policy initiatives is interesting - but take care with your writing - try to be clear about what you're trying to say - I think you write that the new policy idea about teachers and unruly pupils is another Tory 'bride' - I think you mean bribe - and I'm not sure that's the right word to describe it... Overall in the post, you develop some interesting ideas but you need to make sure that they flow together into a coherent argument.
Watch out for your links - neither of the links to BBC news stories seem to work - you also haven't put links in the review of the Go Fug Yourself blog - you need to put links in the posts on your assessment blog.
You've used quite a small point size on the body text in your posts - remember that reading on screen is difficult - you need to help your readers. Remember to break up long paras too.
Try to find ways to add visuals to your posts - in general, it's ok to borrow visuals if you credit them or link back to the site where they came from.
But overall, this is definitely going in the right direction.
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